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1. dribblingpensioner
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   Jan 12, 2012, 8:36 PM

   poem about the snow .

   http://dribblingpensioner.wordpress.com/2012/01/12/poem-snow-flakes/

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2. thepostic
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   Jan 13, 2012, 12:01 AM

   Very nice and soothing. Using short, choppy verses is one of my personal favorite poetry styles. The only criticism I have of the poem is the "white...moonlight...bright" rhyming. I think the rhyming creates a break in the flow. That might be intentional, but I think that the mood set at the start of the poem was very calm and relaxing and that rhyme breaks some of that. But overall I thought it is a very good poem.

3. dribblingpensioner
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   Jan 13, 2012, 8:42 PM

   postic, thanks very much for your comment, I did not mean it to rhyme but thats how it turned out.

   You might enjoy the rest of my poems, all short and no rhyming, no sense either :)

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